Caught on the cusp of a cloud
In wisps of pink ribbon
Not floating exactly:
Pummelling through unborn rain –
A dream of laughter.
I turn a grain of sand with the tip of my tongue
Against conch-teeth.
As my body dissintegrates into the surf,
Time swirls.
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Beautiful
Thank you, Monique. I am glad you thought it so.
Wonderful images Vic.
At times I find it easier to convey feelings through imagery. Thank you.
Lovely evocative imagery, Vic. All 5 senses in one little poem – I can see, smell, hear, taste and feel the sea, the sky!! 🙂
It has been a long time since I have penned rather than typed a poem first, but it appears that paper requires simplicity and simplicity – at least in that moment – had treasures of its own to offer. 🙂 Thank you, Lee-Anne.
Yes indeed!
I know what you mean about writing it out. Computers are wonderful but there’s something about hand-on-paper…I read somewhere that you think more when actually penning 🙂
Do you carry a little notebook with you, Vic in case you get a good idea?
I do have a notebook with me. Always. Its is a black moleskine. I have fragments of anything and everything within 🙂
Vic, that’s exquisite even by your high standards.
I am touched, as aways, by your generosity in praise. Thank you, Richard.
It was the truth, Vic. Simple as.
All the more appreciated 🙂
There’s something very un-earthly about this, yet, at the same time, something universal. Do we embrace or resist change? Timeless question, I feel. An emotive poem, Vic.
Your commentary as always cuts to the core and I always look forward to it. Thank you, Chris.
Wowsa, sending shivers to the amygdala, Vic, with “unborn rain” and the there-ness of “conch-teeth,” which I can feel on my skin. Lovely in its resoluteness in the face of dissolution!
I was reflecting today on the impossibility of capturing into words the indefinite in-between and yet your comment persuaded me that – for once at least – I just about managed it. Thank you!
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Wonderful imagery in your words and you have excelled yourself with your choice of photo. 🙂
It was a challenge to find the right one. So glad you liked it. Thank you, Suzy.